The adverb tug of war rails on. Author Sharon
Ledwith presents a good case against it and other writing bad habits in today’s
piece:
From Sharon Ledwith, Author
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The word “as” is not
your friend. It is almost never your best choice. In any MS, find all
occurrences of it and cut at least half. This is especially true when it occurs
near a dialogue tag.
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You don’t need both an
action tag and a dialogue tag. For example: Jojo sneered at him, saying, “That
was helpful.” Those should look like this: Jojo sneered. “That was helpful.”
(This is where many of those words were cut)
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Dialogue tags go after
the first clause in the dialogue, not at the end, unless it’s a short bit of
dialogue and we know exactly who’s speaking. “Thanks,” Monkey said. “You never
know when you’re going to need an antique bassoon.”
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Avoid adverbs,
especially around dialogue tags. “I hate you, you big fat jerk!” Merry screamed
furiously. No, really, he’s furious? We got that from the dialogue AND the verb
(scream), you don’t have to beat us with it by adding on an adverb.
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People don’t usually use
each other’s names very much when speaking together.
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A sentence with 2
independent clauses does not have a comma: My daughter turned on Dr. Who and
her friend rolled her eyes. NOT: My daughter turned on Dr. Who, and her friend
rolled her eyes.
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Use “said” 95% of the
time. Delete your thesaurus’ entry for the word “said,” and don’t use
replacement words for it, except in very rare absolutely necessary cases.
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Don’t use dialogue tags
at all unless it’s otherwise unclear who’s speaking. If you need to indicate
who’s speaking, try to use an action tag instead of a dialogue tag: Jingle
jumped out of his chair. “I know that elf!”
That’s it. Well, not
all. There’s always something when it comes to polishing and gleaning your
manuscript to share with the world. The above sage advice was passed on to me
because I made these common mistakes. I thought I’d share them so that any
writer reading this may in turn, better their best.
Here’s a glimpse of the
premises of both my young adult series:
The Last Timekeepers
Time Travel Adventures…
Chosen by an Atlantean
Magus to be Timekeepers—legendary time travelers sworn to keep history safe
from the evil Belial—five classmates are sent into the past to restore balance,
and bring order back into the world, one mission at a time.
Children are the keys to our future. And now, children are the
only hope for our past.
Mysterious Tales from Fairy
Falls Teen Psychic Mysteries…
Imagine a teenager
possessing a psychic ability and struggling to cope with its freakish power.
There’s no hope for a normal life, and no one who understands. Now, imagine
being uprooted and forced to live in a small tourist town where nothing much
ever happens. It’s bores-ville from the get-go. Until mysterious things start
to happen.
Welcome to Fairy Falls. Expect the unexpected.
The Last Timekeepers Time Travel Adventure Series:
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Mysterious Tales from Fairy Falls Teen Psychic Mystery Series:
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Sharon Ledwith is the author of the middle-grade/young adult time travel adventure series, THE LAST TIMEKEEPERS, and the award-winning teen psychic mystery series, MYSTERIOUS TALES FROM FAIRY FALLS. When not writing, researching, or revising, she enjoys reading, exercising, anything arcane, and an occasional dram of scotch. Sharon lives a serene, yet busy life in a southern tourist region of Ontario, Canada, with her spoiled hubby, and a moody calico cat.
Learn more about Sharon
Ledwith on her WEBSITE and BLOG.
Look up her AMAZON AUTHOR page for a list of current
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